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Heart Song  [E]
My RhymeZone contest entry for "understanding" (Form: English Sonnet)
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ken,

I like this poem very much. I loved the rhyme and the meaning of the poem. I too like soundtracks/lyrics with meaning to them, and I absolutely love music that stirs some kind of emotion within me.

I thought that you could use a different word instead of sense in this line: I sense the deep emotions that they share This is because the persona already knows the deep emotion that's in the music, so he won't sense it. Also, I think we usually sense something that's external. This emotion is getting to the persona through music. Maybe a word like live or experience would do but experience will add the number of syllabus.

I enjoyed this beautifully written poem. Write on!

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