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The Coven  [18+]
That’s right. An honest-to-God coven of witches in Los Angeles. A "Screams" Entry
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Review of The Coven  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon ,

I decided to review your story because you posted it in my notebook comment section *Laugh*. I would have still reviewed it if you posted it in your notebook *Smile*.

I thought it was a creepy story.

The setting was a dark alley at the beginning which sets the atmosphere for horror. But I didn't see where the other people in weird outfit were. I just saw an altar, so I'm assuming the witches were in a church? Setting plays a very important role especially in scary stories.

My favorite part was the ending where they seemed to have tricked Liz and something seemed to have got into her mind because of the laughter she heard. That's how I interpreted it.

With deliberateness, she up held up a large

From what I read, Liz was excited. Did she feel scared for being among witches? You also still have some words to make it scarier. Maybe add that the man was tortured because he was caught betraying them (just like Liz was)?

You incorporated the prompt so well into this story *Thumbsup*.

Wish you luck and write on!

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