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Review by jaya h
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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The piece is out of contest. Needs reediting with punctuation marks to make it easy to read. What's a thought process behind it? first sentence reads as a person can't see but then it seems the sight comes back magically?
a reader gets confused, and can't enjoy the feelings as expected .
An interesting work,
Jaya H.

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