Hi! I'm judging "Invalid Item"  for Round 66 and thought I should give everyone some feedback on their epistles!

Some things I Like:

This is a lovely piece! The flow is quite nice, and the rhymes don't seem forced at all. For me, the word choice is what really sells the piece though. Stunning. You make your words count. Very emotive and strong.

Observations & Suggestions:

Sadly, I do not think that this style fits the contest prompt. An epistle is supposed to read like a letter, speaking directly to the reader or a particular audience. This piece does not do that, which is a shame. I can tell you right now that you likely will not place in the contest solely for that reason. This is one reason why I prefer contests with no prompts, but as a judge, I work with what I'm given to work with.

I will say this though: You will get an awardicon for this piece, simply because I feel that you deserve one. I am almost finished judging, and this is in my top two favorites. Disqualified or not, that counts for something.

That said, I think that you lost it a little bit on the second stanza. It doesn't quite gel. I like what it says, but it is the weakest stanza in the piece. I would consider revising a little there.

Overall, I really like the piece. Thank you for entering the contest, and I am glad that the prompt inspired you, even if it doesn't quite fit the prompt. Well done.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .