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Review of Flowers  
Review by Siobhan Falen
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well, hello there: I am reviewing you for the "I write in December..." activity and what an excellent prompt.

What I love about your work: This provides intrigue, darkness, great conflict, and the possibility of a supernatural romance; all great things to start a story out with.

Why I could relate to your work: I love prompts, as it's always nice to think outside of my box. This certainly invites my imagination to come up with something, so nicely done.

My suggestions: I would recommend removing the first two hads. With how short this is (reasonably so considering it's a prompt), it's difficult not to get distracted by so many "had"s.

Noticeable typos: The last line seems like it could use some punctuation tweaking, but overall, I didn't see anything that just slapped me out of your story.

In conclusion: I definitely think this is an interesting prompt that could spur all sorts of engaging stories. Nicely done and best of luck.


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