Hi, I'm Bikerider , a judge for

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I have read your entry, "Billy Bob Joe Smith McRodney Fred Jr."  and I offer this review for your consideration. I hope you find my comments helpful.

Story:

Sometimes a story is written for the simple purpose of stretching our imagination genes, and I think this story qualifies as one of those. It's fun to read, and I hope you had fun writing it.

Character:

While there are a couple of other 'characters' mentioned, only one character in this story is important; Billy Bob Joe Smith...well, you know his name by now. We don't get to 'see' much of him physically, but it doesn't take long to see that this poor fellow is either in the midst of a wild dream, or he's traveling through Okeechobee, Florida. Either way, his surroundings are very strange.

But most of all, I like the narrator. He can change the setting, the location, and the other characters at will, just as a narrator should--even if it's been a long day.

Dialogue:

The dialogue used in this story is appropriate, and because the surroundings are strange, the strange dialogue is appropriate.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling:

I saw no errors that distract from the story.

Comments:

I admit to not really knowing what this story is really about. A man with a strange name is strolling through a location that is odd, filled with oddities, and ends oddly.

One thing: Since the story narrator can do whatever he pleases, maybe next time he or she will see fit to use a larger font, something like 3.5, so that the story is easier to read and presents in a better way. Whatdoyasay, Mr. Narrator, larger font next time?

What can I say? Some stories don't have to have meaning, they can just be us, letting our imaginations run wild.







My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .