Hello, Barbie A . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to be reviewing your short story, {item:} today. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely.

General Impressions: This seems like an interesting beginning to a story. We all have different versions of ourselves and it's good to get those off our chest when we get the chance. Writing is a perfect way to show that other side. You just have to jump into it and get your feet wet! It could even be part of a mini-series about your or a blog of some sort. Blogging is a lot of fun on the site. Let me know if you want more information on how to get involved!

Best Parts: I like the font and how it gets bigger as the text goes. It really brings my eyes to the center of the piece and it's so easy to read. The beginning was a good hook where you talk about waking up as older version of yourself one day. I think everyone goes through that at some point and I'm hoping to prepare myself early for it!

Possible Suggestions: The writing is interesting now, but really seems like the beginning of something rather than an item that can be given feedback as a full piece. It would almost make for a good introduction to a story. There were some issues with 'then' instead of 'than' and the questions seemed to get a bit overwhelming at one point, but for the most part, I see a fun beginning!

Summary: I hope you'll decide to expand on this one and make it something great. It's always interesting to let a different version of ourselves come out in a story. Thanks again for sharing!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .