Hello TJ Marie,

I am reviewing your poem as part of week 12 I write.



My first suggestion would be to remove the title from the body of the poem as the title is always at the top of the page. I would also suggest placing the definition of the Acrostic at the bottom of the poem. This would be much better for appearance.



1. Title
The title fits the poem as the Acrostic is correct.



2. Syntax
Spelling was correct. There were some problems with punctuation and grammar. You had an unfinished sentence here or there, and some of the commas were unnecessary. I would suggest typing your work on MS Word before creating your item. This has saved me many a headache when it comes to editing my work.



3. Form and Mechanics
This is an Acrostic poem. It requires no rhyme, syllabic count, and no meter. It requires only sentences and phrases, and the first letter of each line must be the corresponding letter of the title. The form is written correctly. The poem is placed in the center of the page which seems to be correct, and is visually pleasing.



4. Excerpt

"Ruined angel is full of trickery and spells,
One evil one, sees her as unbidden"

Is she to blame for it all, of...?



Over all, this is an acrostic that follows the rules. There are a few spots that need some work, but once you tighten this one up a bit you'll have a keeper. Remember, these are simply my opinions and suggestions, use them or lose them as you see fit. Whatever you do...Keep on Writing!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .