Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

TITLE: The title draws the reader in, wondering what to be let go of... and why

THEME: You have written a wonderfully emotional piece and I am glad I came across it.

TONE: The tone is raw emotion and terror, along with exhaustion.

PACE: The pace is somewhat frenzied with a taste of failure and exhaustion

FLOW RHYTHM/METER: Your flow and meter are wonderful and lead the reader down your unenviable road.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: You use imagery wonderfully in your piece. I cold feel the cold tile, the tubes...the refusal to go on

SPELLING/GRAMMAR: there are no errors in these areas

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: I found no errors in your piece.

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: I love the imagery in these final lines...

Silence grows loudly,
Anger cleanses in waves.
Say you don’t want this,
I’ll beg for forgiveness,
Just please let me go.


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