Greetings, goldenautumn! Thank you for bidding on my Romance Package in "Genre Auction and Fundraiser" .

I like this! I also like how you use the cat for the queen to speak her thoughts to.

I have very few suggestions this time around. But as always, if you don't agree with my views, just ignore them. This is your story.

In Paragraph 2, . "Are you alright, Your Majesty." This should end with a question mark instead of a period, since it is a question.

In Paragraph 4, Feeling two half-closed eyes gazing at her, Catherine darted a glance at the cat Misty sprawled out on the bed. His tail tensed and twitched, as he stared at her leg with bright eyes. You may want to consider rewording this. It's just a tad awkward. How could she know she was feeling two half-closed eyes gazing at her? And then at the end of the paragraph, the cat's eyes were described as bright. Did they change then, from half-closed to bright? I do, however, like you showed the cat's tail tense and twitch.

In Paragraph 29, "It was unintentional. I not make that mistake again." You only forgot to type in the word will after I.

This chapter flowed along very nicely! I know this completes the chapter part of your Romance package, but don't be surprised if I read more! I'd like to know who... or what this king is. He seems sincere enough. And who are the guests who'll be arriving shortly? I'm enjoying this.

Favorite lines...

Misty jumped off the bed, spreading his paws like he was flying, making her laugh. "You are funny," she said, petting his fur coat.
[I'm beginning to really like that cat, lol.

Have a great day and...
K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")


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