Review number # 5 of week 2/19-2/25

Hi German,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Blue-eyed Fascination

First Impression: Irina, is a very lucky woman.

What I liked: The reflection of the skies matches her eyes, beautiful imagery.

What needs your attention: In some sections you are rhyming and in others you are not. Are you writing a rhymed poem or a free verse? It makes the reader wonder as the poem unfolds.

Favorite Parts: To her friends she is tender and sincere, again it gives wonderful insight in to the woman that the poem is dedicated to.

Overall Impression: Some parts of the poem express such beautiful words of love and imagery while others like in the third stanza (the first 4 lines of third stanza) take away from the beauty. They really do not add to the poem.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .