Welcome Kurt to WDC! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I was drawn to this evocative title from the Read A Newbie Page! I like the concept of dying embers relating to letting go of the past. The poem made me think of the passage of time and historic ages--I saw Rome burning, and battlefields. I also thought of sitting by a fire throwing bits of journal entries casting off the past as it burns, as in a ceremony. the style of writing reminded me of japanese form which leads the reader to dream and see perspectives beyond. I entered into it with my own responses. Wonderful! I felt you could have left off the "and" as it would read more like your second verse--a little leap from line two to three. I wondered at the use of the gerund "carrying" at first as the past tense works well, but it does actually bring some active energy. I really enjoyed pondering on your short lines with its vivid image and potent vibe. Well done! Thanks for sharing your gift. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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