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 Goodbyes   [E]
Didn't want to let go
by Steph_anie
Review of Goodbyes  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Exclaim*
This is a Simply Positive Review. *Vine2*


*Tulipr* Your poem has a sweet subtlety to it that brings the reader right into the mood. We have all experienced the loss of someone near and dear to us. They do go away but with our Faith in tact, we know we will see them again, and they are not suffering in this world.

Observations:

"& all of them were hard ... & hugs were shared ... & I know their happy " It's better to spell out the word "And" rather than use an ampersand. It is less distracting. *Idea*You could actually drop the "And" altogether. The read would be smoother without the burden of that conjunction.

But it still makes me sad that their so far [they're/they are]

Your poem is quite inspirational and moving. It shows that it was written from the heart. Good job! *Staro*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch
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