Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

TITLE: Definitely an appropriate title; did you mean to spell it NIghtmare?

THEME: The theme is horror and despair and your wonderful imagery paints a vivid picture. Your use of the convention is great, I will have to try it soon.

TONE: the tone is desperation combined with an almost defeated attitude.

PACE: Your pace is quick and your lack of capitalization and lack of end punctuation leads to this.

FLOW/RHYTHM/METER: You have a great perception of word usage, you create a wonderful scene and this is due to your excellent use of the English language. Great Job!

RHYME: Your rhymes are wonderful, nothing seems forced each word plays on the last and only improves your piece.

FORM: This, to me, would be a difficult form because of having to repeat the rhyme so much, you have done well with the form.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: Your imagery, like always is wonderful! I love every part of this poem! It may be one of my favorites of yours!

TECHNICAL: You not only use imagery but the alliteration in so many lines is great!

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: None noted, a truly beautiful piece!

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: These would be my favorite lines ...
ancient skulls, decayed skin, singed hair
silent cries take away my breath

What an image you create!


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