I'm not great at poetry, so take my suggestions with a grain of salt, but my overall impression is that this was a well composed piece about a tragic event in history.
My Favorite Part:
I love how you used the dress. It's a detail that gives life to the poem and stood out to me.
I also thought that it was a brilliant touch to use his thoughts instead of his brains. You were able to elevate it to a new level, showing us that it wasn't just the physical, but more that was taken by the bullet.
You were able to draw the reader in and make them a part of the family. The President was a father, and a great leader. You brought us into his family through the title and the line at the end of the first stanza. Great job!
My Suggestions:
Maybe change the line: never to come clean to never coming clean.
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