Review number # 6 of week 3/20-3/25

Hi Dave

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and for your assignment in the Poet's Place.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Echoes From the Crypt

First Impression: The author is very capable of creating visual imagery. I felt my first read of the work, I could visualize each detail like I was standing there.

What I liked: The second stanza I felt really moved, I sensed the author's reluctance to harm the common folk. A brief glimpse of the author's personality which I find important in all poetry.

What needs your attention: The student bows to the teacher on this, excellent work.

Favorite Parts: I can't separate one particular part because the story told in the poem builds from beginning to end, creating a powerful image of our societal demise. It indicates that is gothic, occult and horror but in reality it could apply to our daily existence at times. Look at how that is happening around the world, so many people weeping in despair, crying out for help, bombings, etc.

Overall Impression: I think the authors descriptive imager was very persuasive. I believe the intent was to make the reader think, feel and challenge themselves to change therefore becoming more than a creature from a crypt. The structure of the Rondeau form fit this particular work very well, I agree with the author it allowed the story to be told with particular emphasis stressed at the right moment. Excellent demonstration, Dave. Just in case I haven't said, thank you for all you do, please note that is one of those moments.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my Immense pleasure to give back to the teacher. I am a grateful student!
Lyn




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