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 I hope you can gather some useful information from the review, even if it is just to find out whether or not I enjoyed reading your piece. Remember, I am but the reader, the story is yours and you alone can decide if anything should be altered. I can merely offer my advice and opinions on what I am reading. My intentions are pure, to never do harm, only offer my view.


Thoughts and expectations from the title:The title didn't really speak to me with this one. I had no clear idea as to what to expect. The title well represents the story without divulging any pertinent information to give away what is going on.

How do I feel about the main protagonist?I like how I was able to associate on a personal level as this character. When an area is hit by tragedy or a body is discovered, your own imagination often wanders and puts a personal spin on it. I feel that the thought process the character had when she thinks about the bread and the door are spot on. Of course she is able to rationalize it away, due to the dog's presence and this too was spot on.

What impact do the secondary characters have? The dog is the tool that enables the main character to take action. The dog lets her know that the threat is real, and not imagined.

The antagonists are the catalyst for the action of the story and are what builds the suspense. Not knowing their whereabouts, how many there are, and what they are doing, help to turn this into a suspense thriller.


Thoughts on the ending:
Disoriented and confused, Janine is arrested and lead away in handcuffs. If the story ends here, it helps to spark debate over gun rights, as well as home owner's rights. Regardless, Janine has just taken a life and now due process must start in order to clear her name. It must be proven that she did so in self defense and until that happens, she is under arrest.

I think this story is one that should be used to spark talk of gun safety and ownership as well as one that well illustrates the proper way to handle such a situation.

Are there any technical issues I want to query?
~The cell was on speaker now. so that Janine (instead of a period here, a comma should be in place)

My overall thoughts:Overall a well written piece and a joy to read.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .