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 | A RACCOON IS NOTHING BUT TROUBLE  [E] A raccoon forced from a chimney makes a "hullabaloo".  |
| (4.5)  HI SandraLynn. I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I found this wonderful child's poem in the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . This is a brilliantly vivid account of the troublesome raccoon in the chimney! I could so imagine the setting and antics from your detailed description and active voice. I think the theme and story images fit the prompt and the child genre really effectively. The poem is well structured with an easy rhyme scheme where you use interesting vocabulary. It was a pleasure to read aloud for its wonderful soundscapes as well. Lines like line 2 in verse 2, line 3 in verse 3 were fun to read.The lines did not seem to have a patterned rhythm but made for a lively and dramatic read. Words like "hullabaloo" and "ruckus" are excellent choices. The raccoon scooting out on a rug was a hilarious visual. I like the comic edge to the seriousness of the event.  Repeating the first verse at the end is emphatic--bringing home the message of a raccoon is trouble. You backed up the premise brilliantly.   This poem really entertained me and kept me following along right to the end. I think kids would enjoy it as well. Thanks for sharing your gift!Good luck in the contest. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 03/29/2015 @ 10:00pm EDT