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Review of Roger the Raccoon  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Smile*HI Miss dragon! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! I found this cute animal poem on the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " .

*Fairyr* I really enjoyed reading about how a raccoon is trouble. It is cool how you tell it from the point of view of Roger Raccoon himself. He seems proud of his reputation! *Laugh* *Thumbsup*

*Fairyr* The poem vibe is lively and the short lines and quick pace will appeal to children and add drama as he regails his antics. Good detail makes the images clear. I like "land in a lump".

*Fairyr* I like the easy rhyme scheme that quickens the flow.The rhythm is not even and you repeat the word "through" in verse 4. Maybe "in each room" would work. Usually in short poems we try not to do close repetitions. I wanted to drop the "and " in line 4 of verse one as redundant.

*Fairyr* It was easy to read and the only places that slowed me down were line 2 in verse 3 and line 3 in verse 4. I liked "wreaking havoc" . Maybe a little tweak to shorten them up for flow. *Wink*

*Starstruck* This is an entertaining poem that children would enjoy. I could imagine the raccoon's attitude and his antics and liked the pace and the idea that evidence of his passing is obvious. Good job!
Thanks for sharing your gift! Good luck in the contest.

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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