Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

TITLE: Knowing your love of God I felt I knew where this poem was going, thank you for pleasantly surprising me.

THEME: Your love of the Lord resounds in each line, what a wonderful job you have done here!

TONE: The tone is contemplative and self-questioning. Your choice of words strongly reiterates this.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: This is just my humble opinion, but I would have liked to have seen more figurative language in this piece. For example,

Stanza 1 Line 3 instead of using "hear" you could have used "feel". This uses more imagery, I think and would add alliteration as well.

Stanza 3 Line 2 this line would be more powerful with the use of the word "know" rather than "say".

Only you know for sure because it is your poem, these are just suggestions.

SPELLING/GRAMMAR: I noted two errors

Stanza 1 Line 2 feel should be feels
Stanza 2 Line 5 mans should be man's

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES:
I loved these lines, the power behind them is immeasurable...

I feel the breath of God in the winds all encompassing.
I touch the heart of the Lord through intercessory prayer.

Great job!

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