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Hello there, firstwriter42
This is a Simply Positive review! *Die6*

*Pointright* Thank you for entering the Bard's Hall Contest. *Smile* You chose to do the Limerick for this month's contest entry. I have enjoyed reading these creative pieces.

*Castle* Your poetic entry was a quick piece with action and humor, as should be in this type of poem.

Observation:

It moved smoothly for the most part. I do believe however, the last line might be the problem for me as I read to the end.

"It’s [a] regular brute of a Bee.’" However, two lines end with the rhyming word "bee." I wonder if the line could be reworked to hit upon the point being made without the repeat?

Example: Bee's a regular brute you see. Just my quick reword , I'm sure you could come up with something much better. *Wink*

Otherwise, well done and a fun read! *Wave3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch








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