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![]() | I Know A Girl ![]() A girl talks about knowing a girl...curious? ![]() |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hello Nicole Lundrigan ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() I thought this was an interesting topic for a poem. I think a lot of people can relate to the idea of not really being able to show who they truly are to others. There are a lot of factors that play into this like low self-esteem and shyness. Some people have anxiety issues and this causes them to hide even further because they don't know what people will think if they show their true self. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Some parts worked really well and I felt like you hit a groove near the middle of the poem. I like the repetition of "I know a girl" at the beginning of each line reflecting back to the title of the poem itself. My favorite lines were: She has thoughts she tries to hide, That are pushing her to fall. And I'm terrified to realise that, I have understood them all. This seemed to be the strongest point in the poem. It really peaked here for me. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Some parts felt a little bit awkward. They just didn't read as smoothly as others. The last stanza threw me off a little bit because the rhyming pattern became near rhymes soul/all, killer/mirror, whereas the rest of the poem was exac rhymes. For how can I see her light, When she hides from me to see? This read quite strangely to me. Even though I knew what you meant, it definitely made me do a double take because 'she hides from me to see' is worded a bit off. But I've haven't told a soul This one is just a typo. Easy fix! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() I think you did a good job with this. It had a lot of emotion and heart in it, which always makes for a good read. There are spots where the wording and flow could be tighter, but I enjoyed this for the most part. Thanks again for sharing! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ![]() ![]()
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