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This story raises an interesting question about the way in which the narrator rationalising his actions to himself and potentially to his children should the question ever be asked. But what I found even more intriguing was the setting and the relationship between the narrator and Bert. First, I very quickly found myself engrossed in this tale because your descriptions were very vivid and the scene was easy to imagine. It evoked some memories (real or seen in movies) of endless, hot summers and the way children try to kill time. The way you described the day was quite unique too, so although it was a familiar setting, it was still a new and interesting way to experience it.

The friendship between Bert and the narrator (or where they brothers? It didn't seem clear but it didn't really matter for the story) was very intriguing. They seemed equals in some respects but in others it seemed that Bert had more influence - perhaps he was a little older or just more forceful but he was the one who decided what the two of them would do and that it would be okay to take the soda. Where the narrator was struggling a little with his conscience, Bert seemed to have no such concerns.

I liked the way you showed the narrator's thought process and how he arrived at his decision what to do in the store. What seemed less clear to me was how he decided what to tell his children. Having had the emotional struggle that day, to me it would make more sense if he took the opportunity to tell the whole story which might prompt a discussion and turn into a valuable lesson. But I'm probably looking for something that you didn't intend to be there, and like I said, the choice he made was interesting.


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