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 Molly's Revenge!  [13+]
Molly's family changed really fast, but she has an idea to make it better again.
by Mindy
Review of Molly's Revenge!  
Review by Humming Bird
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello there,
Welcome to WDC. This one looks like a preface to a novel, the paragraphs seem a bit jumpy, not properly connected together. do you plan to expand this into a novel? If so, then what is the conflict? Make it a little more smoother by connecting the paragraphs together, add a bit more actions and descriptions. Keep writing!

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