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 Spring  [E]
Poem about Spring.
by Kat_Sapphire
Review of Spring  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Kat_Sapphire . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. My inbox is open if you have any questions or need help navigating the site. Keep in mind that the following is just the opinion of one reader. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it! If not, feel free to disregard it completely. *Sun* *Peace2*


*Tulipr**Poseyr*General Impressions*Poseyr**Tulipr*
Who doesn't love a nice poem about Spring every once in a while? You've managed to capture the simplicity and beauty of the season in your poem. The title is sort of bland. I mean, there are tons of poems about Spring. What makes yours special? How can you add to the title to make it more unique? *Smile*

*Tulipb**Poseyb*What Worked*Poseyb**Tulipb*
I really enjoyed the descriptions in your poem. It captured the essence of the season, something I miss so much during the long winter months. There was something good in every stanza. The first had the warm breeze that lets us know summer is coming soon. In the second and third, we have blooming greenery from the season's rain. In the last, we get an auditory description of the birds bringing the joy of the season. There was a lot of beauty here.

*Tulipp**Poseyp*Suggestions*Poseyp**Tulipp*
Some of the lines are quite clunky with the given rhyming pattern of ABCB. The first stanza was fine and flowed well. The third line of the second stanza threw it off a little bit. That stanza in itself did not add much to the poem as you also talk about rain in the third stanza. It doesn't really seem necessary to introduce rain in Spring and tell us that there is a reason it is known that way.

*Tulipv**Poseyv*Summary*Poseyv**Tulipv*
Overall, I thought this poem was simple and pretty. There were some lines that could use tightening to make them flow better within the rhyming pattern. I also didn't see the true purpose of the second stanza. Thanks again for sharing with us!


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