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 On The Road  [E]
{Contest} When you go on a car trip shouldn't someone at least know how to get there?
by Nanapockets
Review of On The Road  
Review by Tiggy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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It was very easy to imagine both characters' feelings in this story. She was getting frustrated because he wouldn't ask for directions, he because he insisted he didn't need to. I could sympathise with both of them as the journey went on because they were both so well drawn. It seemed clear from the beginning that she was right and he was indeed lost - perhaps that was because of my own preconceived ideas of the situation, having been on a car trip with someone who had no idea where they were going on many occasions. *Laugh* But the way she continued to fret even after his repeated reassurances was well done. The repetition worked well there and it was clear that her thoughts were racing and centred on that one thing that worried her the most.

Of course it all turned out well, and to my surprise, and hers, he got them there in plenty of time. He didn't just try to calm her down when he insisted that he wasn't lost, he really did know what he was doing. The last couple of paragraphs were very funny and after her mostly self-inflicted ordeal, I don't blame her for not wanting to go on another trip so soon!

I spotted a few minor errors as I was reading. There were a couple of capitalised words in the middle of sentences,

This was Not a highway. and
We won't be late If you would turn around

Do To! – Too.

They were suppose to be – supposed.

Your going to – You’re.

I enjoyed this story, especially her exaggerated fear that they were so lost that they would never find their way and die in the car. Of course that idea was silly but the way you described her thoughts, it made perfect sense to her and added to the humour in this tale.


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