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 Uppity  [13+]
2nd place winner in the short shots contest
by mikema63
Review of Uppity  
Review by Tiggy
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The ending was totally different from where I expected this story to go when I started reading. In my head, I saw the frustrated writer trying to come up with a good short story, and (naturally) assumed that the little girl who suddenly appeared was his 'muse,' some kind of annoying inspiration we all need at times to keep us going. But then it became clear that I was wrong when the story developed and the little girl turned out to be anything but inspirational to his efforts. There was something disturbing about the way she appeared and wouldn't leave, and the mention of 'them' sounded worrying to the readers even if the writer said he didn't care who they were.

By the time the man appeared, it was obvious that things weren't as they first seemed, but you didn't reveal what exactly it was until the end. The explanation was nicely done and everything neatly fell into place. I didn't check the genres before I started reading and in a way I was glad because it kept the sci-fi element a surprise. I thought the idea of the story was very unique and after the way you introduced the writer as the main character at the beginning, the twist worked very well.

The writing was excellent and although there wasn't much in the way of description of the room, it was enough to give the readers a clear image and allow them to concentrate on the interactions between the writer and the other characters, which were well done and showed the writer's thoughts and confusion quite clearly. You probably didn't plan it when you wrote this, but there would be scope to expand this story if you wanted to as you left the question whether the writer would escape open at the end.


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