"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC.
This is a Simply Positive Review.

Awe, poor little thing of beauty, caught-up in its desire to keep moving as nature tells it to do. It never saw the danger of a wiper blade.

Your poem paints a vivid picture of the Monarch butterfly. They are beautiful creatures and very often become a classroom project in schools across the country. I remember when the day came to set the Monarchs free from my son's classroom. They gathered outdoors and watched them head away on their journey.

Your poem was written in a free verse style, thus there was no specific rhyme pattern. In free verse, there needs to be an almost lyrical quality of assonance, consonance and a sprinkle of alliteration in many cases, to keep the rhythm flowing smoothly and creating impact on the reader. Your poem hit many of these lyrical tones.

Observations:

"It's fragile wings beat to the rhythym of a tiny heart." [rhythm]

"Trapped and helpless in a wiper blade.
Headed East on 51 toward the still waters." I think the better word here, would be Heading because it was happening in the present.

Otherwise, well done and chock full of imagery for the mind's eye.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch





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