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Review of Lover Boy  
Review by Tiggy
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The most intriguing thing about this story wasn't so much the plot, it was the main character and the way he developed through the story. At first, the readers knew very little about him. The story didn't even directly start with him although the focus quickly shifted and it became clear that the readers were supposed to stay with him, not with the woman who spoke first. She became important again later in the story, which was a nice way to give the story a rounded feel and connect the ending to the beginning. But right there, you introduced the main character through his interaction, or lack of, with others.

The descriptions of him and his humble abode worked well to give the readers a great image of the scene. It was interesting how the narrator addressed the readers directly although he wasn't involved in the tale itself, he was an impartial observer who knew the main character's thoughts and emotions as well as his background, which made the point of view very unusual. You gave him a very engaging voice which made it easy for the readers to follow the tale.

There was, of course, an event that might have been small for other people but appeared to be very important to the main character, perhaps even life changing. The build-up, the way you ensured the readers would understand how significant it was for the character, was excellent. From the moment you mentioned the picture, it was clear that it would play a big part, and the readers might have been able to guess what was going to happen to the picture but not what an effect it would have on the main character, although the story progressed so well that in the end, it seemed quite logical. A great story, I'm glad I came across it because I enjoyed this a lot!


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