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I liked this little piece about the puppies. I know it isn't easy writing a story in 100 words, but you did it! And you did a fine job.

I have a few suggestions listed below. My reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works, and leave the rest.

I did wonder, however, how a puppy could jump into your truck... unless, of course, you had a very low-to-the-ground vehicle. And perhaps the puppies were bigger than I visualized, so don't listen to me, lol. I'm used to vans and smaller puppies, so as you can see, this is only a point of view issue, not a correction.

The other thing that stood out, was that the mother dog and her pups rushed up to you. It's hard for me to imagine puppies rushing, though this is only my humble opinion. Perhaps scampering or racing or something else might work better... again, in my humble opinion.

Favorite lines...

I picked up the one that was hanging back a bit - his little heart beating fast against me.

Oh, that is so sweet! I could feel his heart, too. We used to breed our Golden years ago (five litters) and those little pups were just the sweetest things.

Nice work, LibraryPat! You've written a fine piece, all within 100 words.

Have a great day and'
K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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