Review number # 5 of week May 14-20th

Hi James,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Family Things

First Impression: My husband cringes too when I stop and look at decorative boxes. I can tell you what each box holds, what year and most of what is inside.

What I liked: How easy it was to connect with Robin and Carl, they are the typical couple browsing and talking together on a nice day.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is just right as it is to me.

Favorite Parts: The memory of the secretary, I used to have sit at the table and write over and over "I will not speak. I will remain silent until given permission to speak." My father was very strict and mean spirited. I could relate to Carl not wanting to discuss the situation.

Overall Impression: The story flowed very well, the dialogue engaged me throughout the story. I connected with the characters through out the story.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .