Review number # 1 of week June 18th-24th



Hi Smee

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive and the "Game of Thrones" .

Title: Happiness

First Impression: Wow, initially, I thought I was reading a typical feel good story until I got to the end, I didn't see the cliffhanger coming. I became choked up.

What I liked: The beginning luring the reader with images of a new man driving at break neck speed down the highway. It satisfied this reader's adrenaline junkie rush. I loved driving myself that way.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I enjoyed it immensely as it is. I noted at the conclusion you have already done edits.

Favorite Parts: The paragraph before the ending about the memories sounding complete, I found myself wondering why she didn't know his hair color or what she was wearing or even the weather. If the date was so hot why are those details foggy? But then I got to the next sentence and it all made sense. I paused there and went back to re-read the previous paragraphs to feel her memories again.

Overall Impression: This short story offers the reader an interesting ride in a car with a couple that changes their life forever, the memories that linger after that day are random vivid details that were left while others were stolen the moment the other car struck.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my Immense pleasure!

What does this fox say? Very moving short story!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .