What Caught My Eye

I was working on a challenge and searched for items about abuse. The title definitely caught my eye. Very powerful.

Favorite Aspects

I have read quite a few poems about abuse today. All sorts of abuse. It is an emotive subject, but it is not always easy to write about (believe me, I know).

Of all those I have read so far, this is the most emotive. The language is all conversational, there is no imagery at all, and the word choice is not super interesting or intriguing or creative... but the words hold power nonetheless. I think that the awardicon on this piece has it right: it sounds honest.

Effect

That is about all I have to say about it. Could it have better technique? Yes, undoubtedly. The opening hook could be more engaging, the verbs could offer more action, the rhythm could be a bit smoother here and there. I'd give 2-stars for the writing and 5-stars for the emotion. In the end, that average is where my rating comes from. It is lovely with room for improvement if you ever decide to revisit it.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .