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 Excedrine Headache 415  [E]
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by fyn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Sun**BalloonP*Hail Fyn! I hope you are enjoying your port raid!*Delight*

*Sun*I don't get migranes but I have friend's who do and you create a potent image of what that looks and feels like. Wow! The words and images you use are vivid and effective to emulate what happens in your head. "drums" "steel" yikes.

The free flow suits the theme and emotional content and I liked reading it aloud. You word choice created some vibrant soundscapes: "Metallic..steel" and verse 3 was amazing for that. Wow! *Thumbsup* Brilliant image is "nausea tsunamis". It just sounds so appealing yet the experience is not. I can't stand headaches of nausea so I can't imagine them together.
I learned a new word too. "mouldered" I had to go look it up as I knew "mouldy". *Wink* That is an explicit image too. ew! Messy.

After following you in the trauma of a migraine I then go to laugh at the end when you give a cause! LOL That might just be enough stress to cause it. Nice twist out of the physical experience to a rational tone and message. Well done. I could almost feel the plunk to the floor at the end.

The title bears the theme and the hint that this is not the first headache but that this one require something stronger than aspirin.*Thumbsup* Preparing us was a good idea. I hope you don't really count. I notice that the title on the page itself has a typo. You added a "d" to headache. *Wink*

Truly you are a word wizard when you can so vividly describe a migraine and make it poetic! *Starstruck* Thanks for sharing.

Light on the path as you write on!

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