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| (5.0)   Hail Pepper! I am happy to do another Surprise review with to celebrate you! Your last story was amazing!Wow! This story is so dramatically written right from the start. Spellbound, I couldn't stop reading as you took me into this girl's psyche and world. I could see the scenes, feel her vibe and almost cried at the end. Wow! You really got inside this girl's head--lost teenager, addict looking for home again and drew me right along.  What a sad ending! Many times it is true one can't go home again.I liked the darker tone of the girl's experience in the car. Addiction visions we think but then at the end, wonder what had happened to the mom. You have us rethink, was this a dream image melded with the drug induced one? The words "eerily familiar" become a clue. The main character is potently shown and the way she spoke added to the picture. The action is vital and the details are so vivid. eg. falling in the mud, her sweaty palms, etc. The first line gripped me as we ride with her. The short sentences and style of writing suited the way she might think in her head. Very realistic and drove the energy and pace.  The way you have her recall childhood relationships and the hurtful words is natural as well: Two journeys at the same time--she trying to get back to home and reliving the past. The scenario and details you use I am sure are relevant to many in these abusive situations. Well chosen. I was thrown out of the story only once with the word "mammoth chasm". It just seemed a bit extreme or something. I had to reread it to get the idea of a mud hole.  I was expecting a gaping hole or cave-in.  Could be just my imagination.I really enjoyed engaging in this real to life dramatic scene. You made me feel for the character and see how drugs truly become a needed "candy" before all else and possible effects. Wow! Gripping. Sad. Thanks for sharing such a vision and moving story. You have a gift!  Light on the path as you write on!  A Review from "Simply Positive Review Forum " ! Eyestar ** Image ID #1919873 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 06/23/2015 @ 3:08pm EDT