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  happy Birthday Darleen! I am happy to do a review with to celebrate you! Wow! I like the theme that the title reflects! Acrostics always appeal to me and yours is a fine model. I like the way you weave the words and do not do the usually capitalisation. It really works!The enjambents create potent effect especially "for" in the first verse, which seems to lend potency to the next word; and "whispering" and "if" in the second. The punctuation is effective for the pause in the long phrasing in verse one to verse two. It is different to have less periods. The poem captures the essence of Moon power as often heard of in collective circles. I like the idea of secrets or "mysteries" drawn out, as we do, at times, open to muses differently at night than in the day. Speaks to the notion of unconscious and the energy pulls of the moon on earth as well. The image of "brimming" is vivid and delightful to imagine the fun. The composition is well conceived and I appreciate the effort it took to get this to flow so coherently given the form. I wondered about the use of the adverb as I hear they are not so liked as clear descriptors. eg "constantly". Not sure what else you would say!  The appreciation of the moon is apparent from words and tone. And Moon goddesses everywhere would appreciate the tribute in this expression. Well done!   I hope, when you draw down the moon, it brings best of all wishes for your birthday and the coming year. Light on the path as you write on!  A Review from "Simply Positive Review Forum "  ! Eyestar ** Image ID #1919873 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 06/24/2015 @ 6:15pm EDT