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Given: Jun 23, 2015 at 7:25pm
Length: 465 Characters |
458 w/o WritingML
I was totally entranced until I hit the F word. That brought me up short and I lost interest. Nice going up until then, good imagery, good teasing/tantalizing and build up.
Great hinting at the future problems, especially with his attitude about the laws. I am curious, but didn't want to run into the foul language. I bet you could do without the F word. lol If you ever do a rewrite with out the worst swear words, let me know.
love, LinnAnn
You responded to this review 06/28/2015 @ 3:00pm EDT
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