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Greetings from House Florent, "King's Landing updating " !

Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today.

*Sun* What I really liked about this: It captivated me. Your flow is great; your content says a lot in very few words. It makes the reader ponder what you have written. I've read this over a few different times and seem to find something new each time.

*Clouds* You might want to consider: That first line: Dreams that causes excitement dies, perhaps might read... Dreams that cause excitement die, since "Dreams" is plural, causes should be cause, and "dies" should be die. *Smile*

*Starb* Final thoughts... I can truly relate to this poem, though I don't on a personal level. I see this happening in our world and it's so sad. What has happened? I feel terrible that humans are losing hope. Is it the job situation? Easy access to credit card spending? Too much violence in the media and electronic gaming? Teaching children to grow up and become narcissistic? What happened to working hard for our money and paying cash for things? How can life be so easy in one area and so hard in another? Losing hope (what a great title) could be blamed on the lack of long-term personal satisfaction. How can humans beings be happy and satisfied long term with so much anxiety going on, and multi-tasking? Quick satisfaction helps get us by at the moment, but it doesn't stick so we need another quick fix. I don't know what's happening to the human race, but it seems to me, more and more people are angry, spiteful, looking for a reason to not like others. At least those are my thoughts and feelings. It's kind of scary. Thank you for sharing this poem. It definitely makes one ponder.

Have a great day and...
*Tulipp*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Tulipp*

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