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Review of The Wise Man  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today. As part of my raid from Team Florent, I am reviewing "Invalid Item" 

*Sun* What I really liked about this: I loved everything about this! Your words flowed nicely and I felt a peace as I read along about the wise man and the people who asked their reverent questions and built the weak shelter around him to protect him against the elements. I also liked the reference to prayers clasped in their hands. I was surprised by the ending, which was perfect! Nice work, Andrew!

*Clouds* You might want to consider: Most everything looks great! If anything, you might consider omitting the second would in the following line: People would pass by and in hushed tones would say, .

*Starb* Final thoughts...You obviously have a great gift for writing. Your tone was soothing throughout this short piece, including the surprise ending. I enjoyed this and actually, wouldn't mind having a book filled with little stories similar to this. Have you ever considered writing a book like that? I love short stories, along with short chapters. *Wink* Best of luck in your future of writing, Andrew!

Have a great day and...
*Tulipp*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Tulipp*

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