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Review by Cubby
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings from House Florent, "King's Landing updating " !

Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today. As part of my raid from Team Florent, I am reviewing "Invalid Item" 

*Sun* What I really liked about this: Aha! Another short story for your book! *Bigsmile* Let me know if and when you decide to do this! I really like the simplicity of your stories. They flow so nicely yet have an impact. I do believe you have a gift for this style of writing. And you write so flawlessly, it's like you are a storyteller.

*Clouds* You might want to consider: The only thing that bothered me, was the title: The Shirtless King. It's actually a great title, but it gives it away, right from the beginning. I mean, I knew right away that the shirtless man was the king. And I kept thinking about it, so it took away from the story. I believe if you change your--yes, awesome--title, it would be a more pleasant surprise when the reader figures out the shirtless man was, in fact, the king. The Shirtless Man might be an option, if you decide to change the title, which is entirely up to you. *Wink*

*Starb* Final thoughts... I must admit, I am enjoying this raid in your port. *Smile* Keep up the great work, Andrew! It's so nice to read such enjoyable stories.

Have a great day and...
*Tulipp*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Tulipp*

Cubby ")

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