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*Flower4* Hi, Just That Girl! Thanks for sharing this insightful poem! *Smile* *Flower4*




*Heart*MY FAVORITE PART(S):*Heart*

"Baggy eyes and long lost cries
Under all the useless tears"

This sounds very familiar to me. I used to live with depression on a daily basis. My son and his partying lifestyle, resulting in his losing custody of my granddaughter drove me to the brink of madness. God had it planned all along, and now my sweet girl is a happy, thriving five year old.

Sadly, depression can take some people over the brink. It is so sad to realize that people use a permanent solution to "fix" a temporary problem - and nowadays, due to bullying, its come to teens and even young children who are making this heart-wrenching choice.

It has also caused many a new mother to do harm or worse to her child(ren), and although there are vast amounts of medication for this problem, more and more often its the medicine itself that brings on the depression.

You used good wordage in describing your subject well, especially reference to the small size of the piece. *Checkg*


*Idea*SUGGESTIONS:*Idea*

Only one that I could find:

● "Under all the broken Bliss bliss."

Other than that, perfect grammar and spelling. Great job! *Badge*



IN CLOSING

Thanks again for sharing this short but poignant poem. You described the underlying feeling of depression well. *Stary*

I think you are a very good writer,and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! *Pencil*


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