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Whispering Walls  [13+]
Flint tries to disprove the curse of Friday the 13th.
by Nixie
Review of Whispering Walls  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Friday 13th has been a topic in the horror and supernatural genre for a long time, there are many writings I have read about it and each one makes me shudders for they are really powerful and unique in their own way. That is why I like to read items with a similar theme.

The beginning of your story is good, the reader already had an idea that nothing good would happen with Flint and it is what happened but the way you presented it was scary. Thank God, it is day and I wasn't scared! *Laugh*

The thing that really fascinated me was that the walls, the branch, everything explained how everything else was a creation of mind to make him think rational and to indicate good and bad. It was a very powerful feature! I had just one question, will he return to his family like he did all those years and then come back again?

The flow of your story was good and there was no interruption or any place where I had to stop and read the story again. The point of view here is third person, it was easy to read, follow and understand throughout the story. Well done! The format of your story was good and really easy to understand and follow.

The dialogues in your story were written correctly and they enhanced your work. They did not distract the reader from the story and there was no overuse of dialogue tags or character's dialogues were not mixed with one another. The dialogues added the reader into the conversation as the reader could imagine the conversation as a third person.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!
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