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| (4.5)   Affiliated with "Blog City ~ Every Blogger's Paradise" Greetings from House Florent, "King's Landing updating " !Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today. As part of my raid from Team Florent, I am reviewing "Invalid Item"  What I really liked about this: I found this very interesting, a point of view of the same scene from three different perspectives: the neighbor(s), the wife, and the man drawing attention to himself in the rain. I like that. It's like an exercise, in a way, giving depth to what's going on. Nice job on the old couple, by the way.  Great dialogue and believable images. Reminded me of how my grandparents might be in a situation like that.   You might want to consider: The only thing that threw me off just a little, was I didn't realize the wife, Sandra, was on the phone to her sister Anja, till towards the end. When I reread that section, it made sense, but not the first time. It could, however, be me... since it is 6am and I'm still on my first cup of coffee.   Final thoughts... I can't tell you enough how much I like the idea of putting one scene in different perspectives. I noticed this was for "Merit Badge Projects" . What a great idea! I enjoyed this very much! Thanks for sharing it. Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ") A "Simply Positive Review Forum " Review My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 05/04/2016 @ 8:06pm EDT