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Review of Never-Will  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi! My name is Cubby and I will be providing you with feedback today. As part of my raid from Team Florent, I am reviewing "Invalid Item" 

*Sun* What I really liked about this: This is exceptional, Riot! And your beautiful awardicon ribbon is well-deserved. Wow. This is powerful and so, so true. I loved everything about this. The two examples of the kids who were not given much hope (and they proved others wrong) and the prom queen who everyone assumed would excel, going far, but she ended her life with pills. I can't tell you enough how much I like this piece. Once again, you've proven to be an extremely talented writer/poet. I also liked the a/b/c/c rhyme pattern. It worked well with this, especially since you were telling us a story. Great job!

*Clouds* You might want to consider: Absolutely nothing! Don't change a thing! It's perfect the way it is, in my humble opinion.

*Starb* Final thoughts... I'm wondering if this is something you witnessed... these kids being told "Never-will" and the prom queen taking her own life? How sad! Though I'm very happy the unexpected kids went on to prove they could do it. Nice work, Riot.

Have a great day and...
*Tulipp*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Tulipp*

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