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Review of Late to School  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Your story brought a smile to my face. a nice story about a boy John who is woken up rudely by his father who leaves the house and he gets up to be prepared for school until he sleeps again! *Laugh*

This has never happened with me, I never sleep like this, thank God otherwise it would be both embarrassing and I would have missed things! Your story reminded me of the mistakes we make everyday and how we forget things. For example, I have been going to the academy and I go even on Saturday so this morning, I was like, "Damn, I have to go today too!" And then my brother told me it was sunday so *Blush*. John's waking up for school was quite realistic and I could relate to it although I always wake up on time for school because it is me who has to wake everyone else up too, so if I don't get up, no one gets up! *Facepalm*.

A nice flash fiction that had everything in it that, nothing remained unanswered in the reader's mind. The flow of your story was good, the POV used was third person, the tense was past and it was kept consistent throughout.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!
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