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Hello,Riot

I'm Bikerider and I am reviewing your item for "King's Landing updating "  I hope you find my comments helpful.




I don't usually read stories about vampires, but I'm glad I decided to read this.

You did a good job with this. In the beginning I had no idea what to think. A vampire locked in a closet at school? People bargaining with the vampire in a way they thought would protect them and their families? Then later, after the 'vampire' is released from the closet, I learn that the scene is actually a movie. Okay, but then the man 'acting' as a vampire is not a vampire, only an actor. But no, there's more. The actor 'playing' a role of a vampire turned out to be an actual vampire, and he reveals that because the director says he doesn't act like a vampire. And then in front of everyone, the man who is acting as a vampire and who turns out to actually be a vampire, kills the actor in the presence of everyone.

Is it any wonder why I really enjoyed this story? You did a good job changing the reader's perspective of this story.





I saw no grammar, punctuation, or spelling errors in this story.




I don't know what a typical vampire story is, but I'm sure this ain't it. I like the way you led me around and around inside this story. The thing is, it was never confusing. There is a lot of creativity apparent in this story. You did a good job with description, and the dialogue is well done. The story flows well and the changing role of the main character was done seamlessly.

Well done, an interesting story.

Keep writing.

Bikerider

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