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One Syllable Story  (ASR) Writing prompt where each word of the story can have only one syllable #1971962 by Charlie ~

Hello,Charlie ~

I'm Bikerider and I am reviewing your item for "King's Landing updating "  I hope you find my comments helpful.




I wouldn't have the ability to do this, and my hat is off to you for being able to accomplish it. An entire story, and fairly long, using only words with one syllable. I don't think I would even try this. Here are a couple of places that caught my attention:

And with that, she was off. Out of sight, but still in my mind as she turned the block where the drug store met the snow cone shop. For me, this was the turning point of the story. This is where the character has chosen and now he watches the result of that choice as Ann walks away.




This is a story that is supposed to use words with only 1 syllable throughout. As much in awe I am that you did that, there was one word, (how incredible) that I saw that is made up of two syllables.

I felt a sad hole form in my chest like I had never known. Maybe you can change never to I had not known. But still, it is incredible that your wrote this entire story with only one word having more than one syllable. Amazing!




As if writing an entire story using only one syllable words isn't enough, your story is also interesting and thought provoking. Many people, I know I have, have had an opportunity to turn away from the life they planned, an opportunity that required a split second decision. Some people turn away from that opportunity, others accept it. Either way, your one syllable word story gives the reader a look at that scenario.

You did a great job with this, and even though there were a couple of errors with the way you presented the dialogue, it still deserves 5 stars.

Great job.

Keep writing.

Bikerider

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