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SIR TOM THUMBE  (13+) re-telling of a fairy tale #230819 by Joy

Hello,Joy

I'm Bikerider and I am reviewing your item for "King's Landing updating " 




Actually, I liked everything about this little story. It reminds me of a show I used to watch on television called "Cracked Fairy Tales." Sometimes we write something just for fun, just to see where our imagination will go if left unchecked. I'm betting that you had a lot of fun writing this story.




Nothing, other than some missing or misplaced commas, I would leave this story just as it is.




I liked this story in its entirety, but there are places in this story that I liked more than others. Here are a few examples of my favorites.

My husband and I would so wish to have a little Thumbe! Please, do help us." A little thumb! And you didn't explain this to the reader, which made it even better. I scratched my head when I read this, thinking, a little thumb? Very good.

I can always appreciate any tidbit that is not part of the insipid English cuisine. Ha! I hope no one from England see this.

On another day, he fell into his mother's butterscotch pudding. The dishwasher repairman who had a yen for butterscotch asked for a taste. I liked this entire paragraph because it brought a lot of humor to the piece.

Speaking of humor. I have always felt that humor is the toughest genre to write. It may be because while I have a good sense of humor I still can't write humor. But you hit the right mark with the humor here. I think some writers would over do the humor here and spoil the story by making it sappy. But not you. The humor you placed here is well done and appropriate, and not over done at all.

Good job with this funny little story.

Keep writing.

Bikerider

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