Review of

GOOD STUFF!  (E) The man has good stuff!-For the tall-tale contest- #229867 by Joy

Hello,Joy

I'm Bikerider and I am reviewing your item for "King's Landing updating "  I hope you find my comments helpful.




I find it very difficult to write humor, so my hat is off to you for your ability. There is some funny stuff in the short story.

"Well how about Main Street? I'll drag her over there for you," I offered. She told me to stay on the line and she'd figure it out.

At last, they figured out where I stood. "Can you take care of the paperwork?" someone asked.

"Sure," I said. So I went right over to the local newspaper and placed this ad. "Carport sale. Wife dead. Antique mattress and woman's clothes. Good stuff."

And this, his response to his wife telling him all the things he did wrong.
Upon saying that, she closed her eyes and was motionless. Although I enjoyed being appreciated, I let her sleep. She had said so much, and it was deep. I didn't know I had it in me. I mean I didn't know I had been such a considerate and gentle spouse.




I saw no spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors in this story.




I have often found that when an author wants to be funny in his/her writing, they believe that every sentence should be funny, and so they overdo the humor, or since it's force, there's no humor at all. They miss the set up.

But you didn't miss that elusive set up. Your character misunderstands so much, but his misunderstanding is set up by his wife's admonitions about his past. Misunderstanding what she says is where the humor is found.

You did a good job with this and make me chuckle. Thanks for sharing.

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