A Review from "Simply Positive Review Forum " ! Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! I found your poem in "Read a Newbie". Although I don't usually read or review poems, this one grabbed my attention with the first word. I wanted to see where devotion and mother would lead when combined. I thought it would be about a mother's devotion for her child. But you made it the other way around. It is about a child's devotion for his mother. It paints a beautiful picture of someone flying all over the world, spreading the message of love through the image of a mother. I liked the way you combined "beauty's adjectives" and "all languages", sending the message that a mother's love for her children is universal and knows no borders and no restrictions. One little thing that could be changed is the brief description, especially "like my left lung". I think something more poetic and sweeter would be more suitable. My favorite word in the whole poem was "luminous". I found it in complete agreement with the concept of motherhood, spreading light and shining from the happiness that her children give her, and I wish my children would describe me this way. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. Keep writing.
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